JAY casually strolling down the street on his way to school. Camera shots shows a third party character following and watching him.
EXT. AT BUS STOP. DAY
JAY late for school and anxiously looks at his watch revealing the time realising that he is now late for school. A camera shot shows a close up of the follower also looking at his watch. JAY takes out his phone and calls his friend
JAY
(in an irritated voice)
listen I'm going to be late for school, tell Miss, she's going to kill me
JAY(come on, where is this bus)
INT. ON THE BUS. DAYJAY on the bus en route to school, staring out of the window.
EXT. ON STREET. NEAR SCHOOL. DAYJAY walks rapidly towards school and hears, a cry for help.
VICTIM
(fearfully shouting)
ahhh! Help! Help!
EXT. ON STREET. NEAR SCHOOL. DAYJAY dashes around the corner of the road, hides around a wall and to his huge surprise witnesses a vicous attack. Victim gets beaten by the attacker and dragged out of JAYS sight.
EXT. ON STREET. NEAR SCHOOL. DAYATTACKER makes an escape and runs past JAY looking him in the eye, closely examining him. Whilst he runs away he drops a suspicous looking package. JAY with full temptation glances at the package. JAY rushes towards the package unzips his bag and throws it in, he then leaves the scene. All through this the follower has been watching his every move.
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Only a few changes were made to the first script to get this one. Firstly we added an extra character (the follower) in order to add suspense, tension and enigmas to the script as the audience will now be asking who this character is? why is he/she following the kid? Any views from this third character will be needed to be shown as if from point of view and somehow allow the audience to see that someone is watching the kid. Dialogue was also added to make the scene more engaging with the audience as before it only had the cries of help from the victim whereas now the man character is heard too.
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